Tuesday, June 23, 2009

Two For Tuesday

I have written absolutely nothing this week, but today I pulled up one of my unfinished manuscripts to try and get something done on it. After ten minutes of wanting to stab myself in the eye because of all the passive voice, I gave up and just started highlighting all of the be, was, been, has and were’s. It is a little depressing. But, here are the last two lines from it:

His shoulders stiffened. “Lock this behind me when I leave.” Without another word, he left her alone.
“Well, Sam,” she looked at the puppy, “looks like it’s you and me against the world.”

As for what I am reading, I just finished Jodie Picoult’s My Sister’s Keeper. Wonderful, amazing book – made me cry like a baby. I won’t give you the last two lines, but here are a few that I liked. It is more than two again, but I’ve always been an overachiever.

“No,” I say automatically. “He’s a service dog.”
“Oh.” The woman straightens, pulls her son away. “But you aren’t blind.”
I’m epileptic, and this is my seizure dog. I think about coming clean , for once, for the first time. But then again, you have to be able to laugh at yourself, don’t you? “I’m a lawyer,” I say, and I grin at her. “He chases ambulances for me.”

I hope things are good with everyone in the world.


Leah J. Utas said...

You've certainly piqued my interest with your two.
Oh, I totally get the passive voice problems. I use it too much.

Barbara Martin said...

I've had passive voice problems, too, Crystal. But your lines are interesting.

Good joke about the lawyer's dog.

Clare2e said...

They're both puppy related! What's great about puppies is they're always ready to join your side against the world if need be. Most especially if your side needs licked or sniffed.

Rick said...

I haven't read "My Sister's Keeper" yet, but after reading this small excerpt, I'm going to buy it and read it straight through. Thanks for the recommendation!