Tuesday, March 30, 2010

Two Sentence Tuesday

It’s time for Two Sentence Tuesday. Currently, I am reading “The Lords of the Underworld” series by Gena Showalter. This is the first I’ve read of her, and I like her. This series is pretty dark, and I like all the doom and gloom, murder and mayhem. Here are the last two lines I read:

Tears streamed down her cheeks, chilling with the cold. How many would she shed before the ducts dried completely?

Ashlyn is, I assume, the heroine of this book. She’s just come in and already been imprisoned in a demon lord dungeon. Lucky girl. Hope things turn around for her.

Now, the last two lines from my WIP. I’m in the editing stage right now, so these lines are from the end of the first chapter. Before, my heroine was too wimpy. I don’t want her to be scared all the time, so it is time for her to be angry. She caught her ex in a compromising position and broke up with him, but now he’s watching her.

“Did you enjoy your night out? You looked so sad and lonely. Let me know when you change your mind and want to come back to me.” Jason’s voice coming from the machine shocked her, but the fact that he’d been watching her pissed her off.

Yep, I know I cheated. More than two lines. Please forgive me!

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Leah J. Utas said...

Ewww, being watched. Creepy. Well done.

Clare2e said...

Good job, Crystal, no doormats!

You're so funny about the Showalter book- "Hope things turn around for her." Somehow, I think they will.

Travis Erwin said...

Nice tension there but I think you could add a bit more by dropping that first her and just say he'd been watching.

Just an idea. Hope you are writing tons.

Grayquill said...

I happened upon you blog this evening and what did I find but a writer and seemingly quite a good one. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your blog, and your two plus sentences. :)

Ursula said...

Wow, Jason sounds like a self-centered control freak. Scary stuff ...